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dédé07 · 21/02/2008, 14h58

Bonjour,
Voilà j'ai de réelles difficultées en ce qui concerne l'anglais...je dois traduire un texte (rassurez-vous je les fait).
Cependant, auriez-vous la gentillesse de corriger mes erreurs? (Cette traduction a été faite par moi et je ne suis pas passée par un traducteur)!
Je vous remercie de votre aide.

A difficult liftMonday, January 16

7hoo: Dring Dring…. Aaaaaaahh! A noise! The alarm rings! And me who just surrender my emotions do get up. You can not t'imaginer how I was exhausted. But to know that we were in Hastings made me happy and nothing could spoil this joy.

8hoo: A Time for breakfast. It's crazy! In this family everything was timed (7hoo is awakening, it 8hoo breakfast at 8 am and 30 all the world leaves the house), it was very well organized, perhaps a little too much and I felt déboussolée, who loves me take my time.
Speaking of breakfast, I was disappointed at not having the right to lunch typically English. Indeed, we had cereal therefore nothing exceptional. But do not think that mainly I complain: the family in which I was dropped was simply fantastic.

8.15: Having prepared at breakneck speed, and I agree Natacha coach… For me I was eager to find other students to harvest their first impression on their new families. Many people appreciate their families despite some exceptions. In fact, some students had fallen in families… strange, apparently not see in this exchange that the financial aspect.

8:30: Go! It was left for another day full of emotions: direction Crest Hill, a school disadvantaged, totally different from ours. Hillcrest school is a British secondary school in Hastings, East Sussex, England. Hillcrest currently has over 700 students.
Among the positive aspects of the school I would say that the atmosphere is pleasant, there is a good relationship between students and teachers, the equipment is also very modern (trampoline, a recording studio, musical instrument and Internet access). Nevertheless, the students are really dispelled (believe me they did not hesitate to meet the teachers). In addition, all students must wear a uniform, which I personally déplairait sharply.

You see, I have something to entrust you:
I believe that at this precise moment, I really realized the chance that I had to have a school like mine, and the idea of an exchange with these students (who were very friendly with us) let me do not indifferent.

… H…: On left high school and left us in the direction of downtown or a questionnaire we expected. Half an hour later, we had the picnic lunch, picnic nicely done by our families. Hum. Therefore… but not very delicious!

… H…:. It was time to go shopping, when I saw all those stores I was thrilled: New-look and a big "Priory Meadow" were to our liking. You know full well how much I love to shop.
My girlfriends and I amusions so that we have not seen
Spend the time and therefore students
And the teachers were no longer in the pick-up point: they were returned to the course because… and that we did understand that a few minutes later after crisscrossed the city: we courûmes as best we could and fortunately nobody we wanted. We continued our journey toward Rye. In fact we were tabled
In this quiet little town, where a questionnaire on the city and more
Particularly on its history should be filled. To tell you everything, perched on a hilltop, the medieval town of Rye is the kind of place that believes straight out of his imagination. A place suspended in time, a peaceful atmosphere, and beautiful streets. Rye is small enough to actually feel at home, but is home to many hidden treasures you want to stay there for all to discover. Indeed, Rye still has a myriad of exciting ancient buildings, witnesses of his past. There are many houses of the eighteenth and monuments dating back to medieval times. I think that Rye has maintained an atmosphere of the village, old values and traditions, it's a great little town whose history is rich and hectic. Nowadays, many artists, artisans and tourists wander through its narrow streets.

After an hour, I stopped with my girlfriend Laura to eat (Yes! It hollow all these visits). We also come to a bakery to buy specialties to our parents.
After several hours spent in this city, it was time to return to our beloved families, who were waiting at the pick-up point.
After discussion with Anya, we went to eat. Despite the lack of specialization, the meal was delicious. Then the family has kindly offered us two films: The first was "Bad Girls"… I was exhausted and had a terrible want to go to sleep but how to say no to this lovely family. We were then left to watch a second film "Bride and prejudiced" in a nice and comfortable lounge with tea at will, an atmosphere of joy: that seriously want?
Parents we
Correspondents spoke of the former and that they were all on a priori
Loved this family, which does not surprise me. You will certainly find
Ridiculous, but it made me feel really at home in this family, they
Were all adorable with us and I loved to talk with them (although that I
Difficult to speak in English).

When the movie ended, although I
Exhausted, Natasha and I have engaged in a conversation, conversation
Short imminent and that did
Finally completed until about 3hOO morning: "Ah still a very short
Night in perspective "I told myself… However, it was nice to talk
With it, and I t'avoue after that night Natasha and I were much
More accomplices.

Wednesday , January

6:00: After a good little shower, I was ready to go down for breakfast. It invigorates always, a good shower, you do not see?

I could then start my day properly with the visit of the museum "Weald and Dowland.

I will talk more worry: this museum is located in a large park in the South Downs, about 10 kilometers north of Chichester. This is a reproduction line with the reality of the time: the reproduction of houses, farms and various rural-oriented buildings that have been saved from oblivion and destruction.

Know that I could also observe a medieval farmhouse named Bayleaf medieval farmstead, a water mill dating from the 17th century and the Downland Gridshell. I also observed how "a traditional farmhouse, kitchens era Tudor, English horses at work and craft demonstrations. But that's not all! You see, I also had the opportunity to visit a
Majestic-timbered farmhouse in Kent, a market hall Hampshire, a Victorian school, a store medieval; workshops for carpentry, plumbing and carpentry; a barn for grain and a wheel walk from the South Downs ... And yet, I can not tell you everything!

We also had to complete a questionnaire on the tour, you see the scenery was beautiful and the visit enabled me to discover how to live and work in the Middle Ages. The picnic was held elsewhere in this
Location, near a lake or duck calling permanently for food and, I am sure, this beautiful scenery t'aurait rained.
Lunch finished, it was time to take the road leading to the Bodiam Castle: the road we seemed interminable but worth it since the castle was beautiful. It is a genuine medieval chateau surrounded by a moat of water. Within the castle was in ruins, but still very impressive nonetheless. Bodiam Castle is situated beside the River Rother in East Sussex and was built in 1385 by a knight. This castle with moat and emerging niches seemed a fairy tale.

What I found damage, and I think that you would have been in agreement with me is the fact that there has been no guide. It is one of the most renowned in England, and the visit would be of value in detail!

After a spell at the supermarket, it was time to return to our families… it was the last evening spent in their company ... You certainly will understand me
If I tell you that Natasha and I had decided to enjoy it. For this, we wanted to spend time with all family members: firstly we did trampoline with Crisa and Amilia for the purpose of
Having fun. When the time came for dinner, I was quite nostalgic and the atmosphere was very quiet coup. I felt sad to leave our family so soon. We had just enough time to commit ourselves to these people that we should already quit ... The meal was once more exquisite and we went watch TV while enjoying an ice cream with the whole family. It was also necessary to complete the "Happy Book 2" which is a family tradition. Indeed, all the people coming to live here are encouraged to give their impression on this family caring. We then went to bed after a discussion with
Parents, but also with Abdoulla who asked us if we stay the course in Hastings we had rained and if we had to return to England. (I of course replied, "Yes")

a final farewell and a small getaway to :Thursday, January London

"Oh! It was really too short ... dire need already exiting. " Those are the first words that came to my mind when we wake up Anya came. Last
Breakfast with the family, the last words addressed to the Abdoul, a "farewell" to the whole family and we mîmes en route to London. It was therefore unclear to the soul that I left my bag in the house where I had established residence
The program was scheduled to visit London TOWER: it was huge and beautiful. Really, you should have see! And big surprise on the time, everything I had brought to cope with the weather I was unnecessary
Today it guards the crown jewels and the biggest diamond in the world that decorates the scepter to the Cross ...
Alternately residence of kings, fortress or prison, a visit to the Tower of London is inevitable
For those who come to admire the English capital.
The visit takes place on a treadmill, to avoid crowding around the jewels.
Before moving to the room where coffers are exposed Treasures of the
Crown, passing an enormous door, it is possible to stop a moment in front of screens on which are broadcast films highlighting
Highlights of the English monarchy: an easy way to dive back into
English history and the different rulers, kings and queens who have
Succeeded in this country.
I was able to discover the history of this medieval fortress is the former residence of the king of England. On discernible on the walls traces of the architecture of different eras. We also learned much from the white tower: the most famous of the tower, an old prison. There is now an interesting collection of armor and weapons (swords, guns, cannons).
I also remember ravens flying above this majestic
Tour. Indeed, legend has it that the day the last crow leaves
The Tower of London, the monarchy will disappear.
This visit has taught me a lot about the traditions of England.
Indeed, The Tower of London is the symbol of the British monarchy, which
Dominated the World eighteenth to the early twentieth century. This place impressed me relatively large and is one of the best visits I have made.

Then we had to eat in the car because of the sad time. On the way, I saw with amazement the big wheel (installed during the transition to the year 2000) and we stopped in front of the palace BUCKINGAM. It is the latest palace in London at the facade and classic. The flag was at half mast which indicated the presence of the Queen at the palace. Unfortunately, we could not visit it.
And then came the last hour of our free time. As time permitting, we preferred to walk: through the numerous parks, discovering small squares, and hallucinantes facades of houses or shops "so British".
It was thus left to go shopping. The city was huge and I felt very small in comparison. I was awed by the beauty of this city: all these department stores, these large cinemas and theatres, the many colors of the city… Each quarter, you see, is a small city in the world: Chinatown, Picadilly, and Circus… I feel really feel all the animation of a particular environment and a microcosm in every part of the city ... All my life overflowing which fascinated me ... You have certainly m'envier because London is a wonderful city for walking, and like all capitals, it has everything to offer to everyone. It is a beautiful city, with a superb architecture, fabulous monuments, parks extraordinary, English .... very English, pubs amazing, incredible holiday, ordinary stars… There were performances in the theaters and on the streets, taxis amazing, buses in imperial red, mail boxes typical… was simply sublime.
An incredible city, London! An incredible charm so british!

Back to our shopping… hum… once our window shopping finished, my friends and I went to a bar rest… which was very pleasant. Then after waiting the
Latecomers to the Centre Point which was our pick-up point, we reprîmes
The road towards Portsmouth or we waiting for the ferry we…
Also made a stop at the supermarket to buy food for our
Picnic collective. When we reached Portsmouth, we found all
Other students who also had gone, but in another city.
It was superb, we only had a good time to tell. Then we dînés together, it was really good and I was able to enjoy my last evening in the
England (on the leaders had a good idea!)
Around 11:00 it was time to board
Board the ferry, even more beautiful than last time. As for berths they were much more comfortable. The night was therefore
Very quiet because we were all tired! However, the sea was rough,
Agitated and consequently some students were ill during the voyage.
Having slept well, another breakfast awaited us on board
Ferry, still delicious.
7.30: After our toilet, we came out of the ferry, we
Were in France and especially at the port of embarkation in Ouistreham.
It made me a strange feeling and I was nostalgic, thinking all
These good times.

**Jean** · 21/02/2008, 15h50

Bonjour,

Comme je te l'ai déjà écrit sur un autre site, écrire en anglais ne consiste pas simplement à traduire du français mot à mot, même si c'est avec l'aide d'un dictionnaire et sans traducteur automatique, ce qu'à Dieu ne plaise.
Si c'était le cas, alors les traducteurs professionnels auraient du souci à se faire.
C'est pourquoi je vais encore me répéter ici : OUBLIE le français, EFFACE ton texte français, ÉCRIS directement en anglais, en PENSANT en anglais, c'est-à-dire en UTILISANT le vocabulaire anglais, en APPLIQUANT les règles de la grammaire anglaise et non pas en essayant de traduire - mal, forcément- quelque chose que tu as d'abord écrit en français.
J'espère avoir été assez clair.

**cmbelgique** · 21/02/2008, 20h56

Sur quel site ?

Comment çà se fait que les étudiants posent leurs questions ailleurs mais retombent tjrs ici ?

**Jean** · 21/02/2008, 22h13

Citation:

Envoyé par cmbelgique

Sur quel site ?

Comment çà se fait que les étudiants posent leurs questions ailleurs mais retombent tjrs ici ?

Parce qu'ils pensent obtenir plus de réponses en multipliant leurs demandes sur plusieurs sites mais en ne changeant pas un iota à leurs "productions".
Cette conduite se multiplie de façon exponentielle sur le Net et c'en devient plus qu'agaçant.
Ces internautes pensent sans doute s'exonérer ainsi d'un effort personnel supplémentaire en faisant faire par d'autres ce qu'ils gagneraient à faire eux-mêmes.
Ô tempora, ô mores...!

dédé07 · 23/02/2008, 01h05

Bon voilà j'ai suvit votre conseil "papy84": j'ai revu mon texte dans son intégralité: j'ai remplacé certains mots qui ne convenaient pas, j'ai également revut la formulation de certaines phrases, la conjugaison des verbes et j'ai essayer, tant bien que mal, de ne pas traduire mot à mot!
Pourriez-vous jetter un coup d'oeil à mon travail?

Wednesday January

6:00: After a little shower, I was ready to go down for breakfast. It always invigorate, a good shower, don’t you see? Then, I could correctly start my day with the museum "Weald and Dowland’s visit. I go to tell you more: this museum is located in a large park in the South Downs, about 10 kilometers north of Chichester. This is a standard reproduction with the reality of the time: the reproduction of houses, farms...
Know that I also could observe a medieval farmhouse named Bayleaf medieval farmstead, a water mill dating from the 17th century and the Downland Gridshell. I also observed how a traditional farmhouse and kitchens dating from the period Tudor function. But this isn’t everything! You see, I also had the opportunity to visit a Victorian school, a medieval store; workshops for carpentry, plumbing and carpentry... And yet, I don’t tell you everything!

We also had to complete a questionnaire on the visit, you see the scenery was beautiful and the visit permited myself to discover the manner to live and work in the Middle Ages. The picnic was held in this site, near a pond where ducks permanently asked for food. I am sure, this beautiful scenery enjoyed you!
Lunch finished, it was time to get going to the Bodiam Castle: the road we seemed interminable but the castle was beautiful. It is a genuine castle of the Middles Ages surrounded by a moat of water. Inside, the castle was in ruins. Bodiam Castle is situated
At the River Rother’s edge in East Sussex and was built in 1385 by a knight. This castle with moat and slits seemed to emerge from a fairy tale.

What a shame because there wasn’t guide. It’s one of the most renowned in England, I think that you will go along with that: the visit would “aurait valut d’etre approfondie”!
After a stop at the supermarket, it was time to return to our families… it was the last evening spent in their company ... You certainly will understand me If I tell you that Natasha and me decided to enjoy it. For this, we wanted to spend time with all family members: firstly we did trampoline with Crisa and Amilia . When the time came for dinner, I was quite nostalgic and the atmosphere was very quiet. I felt sad to leave our family so soon. Just we had enough time to become attached to them that already we had to leave this persons. Once more, The meal was exquisite and we went to watch TV “en savouring” an ice cream with the whole family. Also, It was necessary to complete the "Happy Book 2" which is a family tradition. Indeed, all the people coming to live here gave their impression on this thoughtful family. Then, we went to bed after a conversation with the parents and Abdoulla who asked me if I liked my trip in Hastings and if I would like come back. ( I replied him: “YES”).

Thursday, January à a final “Goodbye” and a day in London.
“Time to go ! Oh ! How short it was ! " Those are the first words that came to my mind when Anya came in the morning . Last breakfast with the family, the last conversation with Abdoulla, last hugs to the family and let’s go to London ! I was quite sad .

The program was scheduled to visit the Tower of London: it was huge and beautiful. Really, you should have seen ! What a surprise when I saw that the weather was so bad!
Today it guards the crown jewels and the biggest diamond in the world that decorates the scepter to the Cross ...
Alternately residence of kings, fortress or prison, a visit to the Tower of London is inescapable for those who come to admire the English capital.
The visit takes place on a treadmill, to avoid crowding around the jewels.
Before moving to the room where are exposed Treasures of the
Crown, you pass an enormous door, it is possible to stop a moment in front of screens on which you can watch movies about the bigs moments of the English monarchy: an easy way to discover English history and the different rulers, kings and queens who have
Succeeded in this country.

I could discover the history of this medieval fortress: it’s the ancient residence of the king of England. On the walls, we can see traces of the architecture of differents eras.
We also learned much from the white tower: the most famous part of the tower, an old prison. There is now an interesting collection of armor and weapons (swords, guns, cannons).
I also remember ravens flying above this majestic Tour. Indeed, accroding to a certain legend, the day when the last crow leaves the Tower of London, the monarchy will disappear.
Thanks to this visit , I’ve learnt a lot about the traditions of England. The Tower of London is the symbol of the British monarchy, which dominated the World from the eighteenth to the early twentieth century. This large place impressed me so much that I consider it as one of the best visits.
Then we had to eat in the bus because of the sad time. On the way, I saw with wonder the big wheel (installed during the transition to the year 2000) and we stopped in front of the palace Buckingam. It is the latest palace in London. It façade was sober an classic. Unfortunately, we could not visit it.
Then, the time of our last free time came. As the weather allowed it, we preferred to walk: to go through the numerous parks, to discover small public garden, and incredible façades of houses or shops "so British".
So, we went to go shopping. The city was huge and I felt very small in comparison. What I mean is that I was stunned by the beauty of this city: all these bigs stores, these larges cinemas and theaters, the many colors of the city… Each quarter, you see, is a small world in the city: Chinatown, Picadilly, and Circus…In this city, there is a lot of things to see, to do...I really felt all the animation of a particular environment and a microcosm in every part of the city ... All inspired me a tireless life which fascinated me ... You certainly have to envy me because London is a wonderful city for walking, and like all capitals, it everything has to offer to everybody. It is a beautiful city, with a superb architecture, fabulous monuments, parks extraordinary, English .... very English, amazings pubs, unbelievable party, anonymous, stars… There were shows in the theaters and on the streets, amazings taxis, red buses, typicals mailboxes … it was wonderful.
An incredible city, an incredible charm so british: London! In short it was fantastic but I won’t tell you any more and I came back to my shopping … hum… once our window- shopping finished, my friends and me went to a bar rest… which was very pleasant. Then after waiting the latecomers to the Centre Point which was our pick-up point, we retook the road towards Portsmouth where we waiting for the ferry...besides we also had a break at the supermarket so as to buy food for our collective picnic. When we arrive in Portsmouth, we found the others students who were gone in England but in another city.
It was superb, we had a lot of things to tell us. Then we had dinner together, it was really good and I could to thrive of my last evening in the
England (the accompanying adult had a good idea!)
Around 11:00 it was time to embark on board a ferry. It was more beautiful even more beautiful than the previous ferry. As for bunks, they were much more comfortable. Therefore, the night was very quiet because we were all tired! However, the sea was rough, stormy and consequently some students were sick during the voyage.
After having slept well, another breakfast awaited us on board ferry, still delicious.
7.30: we got washed and we came out off the ferry, we were in France, at the port of embarkation in Ouistreham. It did me a strange feeling and I was nostalgic, thinking about again all these good times.
Then, we took the bus to go see the Bayeux tapestry in Normandy. It was gigantic and magnificent.
- First there was the Tapestry Gallery on the ground floor:
The visit was with an audio guide commenting on each of the 58 scenes.
The Bayeux Tapestry is a precious source historicals informations about the life during the XI century, as the vessels, meals, clothing, writing, the woman's place, the taste of or arms. It's really a masterpiece. Actually, the famous Bayeux Tapestry is a wool embroidery on a linen, which tells the conquest of the England’s throne by William the Conqueror, Duke of Normandy in 1066. But it also is a fascinating work as graphically as by the quality of its staging.
In a second phase, I saw an interpretation’s room in the first floor: Many thematic panels illustrated, maps and models about the life in Normandy and England in William Ier ‘s time were prsents in this room.
Finally, on the second floor, there was a cinema: in this room, a movie was projected onto Guillaume the Conqueror.
I must admit that I was fascinated by this visit. The comment on the Tapestry was very clear and very rewarding. I’d say that with the Tower of London it has been one of the best tours. There also was a bookshop in which our teachers bought books for our future accounts. Then when the tour ended, sadly because it was the last. The bus took us to "Relay of 3 apples" where a good meal was waiting for us. Then we took the bus where we looked 2 cassettes.
17:00: We arrived in Questembert, pleased to find our friends and parents, but sad to leave England also suddenly ... one week of travel thrilling and unforgettable during which the enconters, the paradisiacals places and the unusuals adventures were linked together during that stay. That way the dream ended ...

Well, dear diary, it’s the end of this exciting journey ... I hope to redo others trips as fascinating, because I’m longing to reopen you for new adventures ...
Je vous remercie pour votre aide...si précieuse!