Correction lettre en anglais - Be-Students - Forum d'entraide et de soutien scolaire gratuit

mohase · 30/12/2007, 16h54

Bonjours tout le monde,
Mon anglais n'est pas super, c'est pourquoi jaimerais savoir si quelqu'un pourrait me corriger ma lettre.
Merci d'avance, vous me sauvez!

My dear friends,

As you know, I went a week ago to the place where I was born.I found it but I was suprised to see that it had changed a lot. In fact, the town is no longer the same, is no longer like I told you but it is a little bit like you told me, it is full of ghosts. Yes, I was a little bit sad to see it. However it still the district of my childhood, I have spend so much time in its streets, I have been loved there, I have been educated there. The list is so long. So even if the town had changed, it helps me to remenber this time of happyness
My return was planned for yesterday so I went to the airport but I didn't take my plane as I told you yerderday at the phone.You know that I am an old man and I feel me like attracted by this place.
So I stay here but not for one or two days, it's for the rest of my life. I love you but I have found here, like I said, feelings so deep which make me feel young and gives me the force and the envie of staying here. I have also met poeple so adorable who knew my familly and day after day I find others who knew me .
I can't tell you how much I am happy. It will be hard without you but I will come every month and I hope that you will come to visit England and blackburn.
Fear for me does not have, be just happy for me. I will come very soon to visit you.
I miss you already, be happy and benefit from the life.

Your faithful friend, who love you.

**Jean** · 30/12/2007, 17h25

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Bonjours tout le monde,
Mon anglais n'est pas super, c'est pourquoi jaimerais savoir si quelqu'un pourrait me corriger ma lettre.
Merci d'avance, vous me sauvez!

My dear friends,

As you know, I went a week ago to the place where I was born. I found it but I was suprised to see that it had changed a lot. In fact, the town is no longer the same, is no longer like I told you but it is a little bit like you told me, it is full of ghosts. Yes, I was a little bit sad to see it. However <it still> the district of my childhood is still there, I <have spend> spent so much time in its streets, I <have been> was loved there, I <have been> was educated there. The list is so long. So even if the town has changed, it helps me to remember this time of happiness.
My return was planned for yesterday so I went to the airport but I didn't take my plane as I told you yesterday on the phone.You know that I am an old man and I feel like I were attracted by this place.
So I stay here but not for one or two days, it's for the rest of my life. I love you but I have found here, like I said, <feelings> so deep feelings which make me feel young and give<s> me the force and the envy <of> to stay<ing> here. I have also met so adorable people <so adorable> who knew my family and day after day I find others who knew me.
I can't tell you how much <I am> happy I am. It will be hard without you but I will come every month and I hope that you will come to visit England and Blackburn.
<Fear for me does not have> Don't worry for me, be just happy for me. I will come very soon to visit you.
I miss you already, be happy and <benefit from the> make the most of life.

Your faithful friend, who loves you.

* Effectivement, il semble que tu aies quelque souci avec la grammaire et l'emploi des temps verbaux.,( Sais-tu que ça se soigne ?(wink)

mohase · 30/12/2007, 17h53

MeRci pour votre aide, c'est trés gentil!
eh bien je pense que ça se soigne mais c'est surtout que je fais des fautes un peu "bête" que je pense pouvoir corriger avec une bonne relecture.

**cmbelgique** · 30/12/2007, 19h03

Alors pense à te relire avant; c'est le meilleur moyen pour éviter les erreurs. Sinon, bienvenue à toi, n'hésite pas à parler de Be-Students à tes amis, c'est le meilleur moyen de nous remercier

**Jean** · 30/12/2007, 19h06

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MeRci pour votre aide, c'est trés gentil! => Avec plaisir.

eh bien je pense que ça se soigne mais c'est surtout que je fais des fautes un peu "bête" que je pense pourvoir corriger avec une bonne relecture.

=> Les fautes sont souvent "bêtes" en effet et tu as tout à fait raison de penser qu'une bonne relecture devrait te permettre, à l'avenir, de te passer de nos services.