I should answer of this question : what are the reasons why you would like to go with the inhabitants of Malawi?
Peut-on me corriger mon texte SVP et me dire s'il y ad'autres raisons ?
I would like to go with them because it’s one of the poorest countries in the world. Nouvelle phrase They don’t have much water or electricity.
The second reason is because of children , theywho don‘t have many school in theirs villages. , and they should have that toNouvelle phrase So they can neither learn and tonorenriching their minds.
The reason is the care , they don’t have anyget nomedical care, and medicine no medication and have no hospital. Nouvelle phraseThey becomefallsick more easily of, contract AIDS or cancer and they letleave theirs children alone in the poverty. Nouvelle phrase Those children become orphans.
I would like to go with them because this country doesn’t have material thingequipment for the agriculture, for the education, for the free time of children and doesn't have so much houseshousing for all the people who live there.
The last reason is about the food. Nouvelle phraseThey don't have enough food for everybody and a lot of them die because of that hunger, there is famine.
Alors à présent et si j'ai bien compris, ce n'est plus le Malawi mais l'Inde...
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Comment ça "sans commentaire"?J'ai trouvé plus de raisons et j'ai mieux développé ça.Tu me dis si tu préfères ça ?
Je préfèrerais que tu ne commettes pas autant de fautes, y compris en français.
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Merci de ta correction mais là aussi je crois que c'est rempli de fautes.
Hélas !
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I would like to go with them because it's one of the poorest countrIES in the world whoWHICH needS help.
There aren't many schools and all children can't study and learn.The rich ONES can go to school but not the poor ONES.
Again, when there are schools, school stationEry lackSlikeSUCH AS drawing pencilS, bookS, penS and eraserS but also educational personNEl : there aren't many teacherS because the country doESn't have a lot OFFINANCIAL RESOURCES/money to pay them.
Instead of going to school, children work in camp to bring their parents some money.
I would also like to go with them because OF theIR poor sloppinessMEDICAL CARE.They have just access to the governmental hospitals whoWHICH are free but those hospitals aren't well equipPED.They need doctorS and bedS for patientS.
Medicines are free but they are in a limited number. India haveHAS the best doctorS in the world but exceptionally for the rich PEOPLE and populationTHOSE who come from Europe.
The Indian population hurt ofSUFFERS FROM a lot of illnessESlikeSUCH AS leprosy and malaria and someone of them die.
In many cornerAREAS of India there is a lack of hygiene, Many people live outside : their clothes are tearnTORN up and holes that is because of the lack of accommodation owedDUE to a strong density of population. TheWater is uncommOn and expensive and the poor PEOPLE can't use it.the essencial thing who is do with it , it"sTHEY ONLY USE IT FOR the farming of the rice. ThePoor PEOPLE eat just rice and beans in leaVES and sometimes they don't eat when there is not enough farming.
Those things makeARE all the reasons whoWHY iI want to go with them to help develop this country and bring them some assetSwhoWHICH can make himTHEM better.
Si à l'avenir tu ne fais pas l'effort de prendre en compte mes corrections afin de ne plus refaire les mêmes fautes, dont certaines sont carrément MONSTRUEUSES, je ne vois aucune raison pour continuer à t'aider.
D'autres que moi auront sans doute plus de patience.
Dernière modification par JRB ; 09-02-2010 à 20h21.
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