Discussion: coréction (letter) expretion écrite

J'ai terminé mon expression écrite , j'aimerai bien quel quelqu'un puise me corrigé
Merci d'avance
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Dear Mr. and Mrs Tom

It's really nice to meet me for a week at home,

I have received you mail, it allowed me to discover where, lived for a week, now it is my turn to introduce myself,

My name is François, I am fourteen years old, I live in France, and more specialty in Britain, in a small city that is near Rennes, I like playing sports and like going to cinema, and interested in new technology I'm in 11th grade

I have a sister called Mary she was thirteen, she's Twirling, My mather is teacher, and my father and commercial kitchen


Thank you for the pictures it allows me to have an idea or I would,


I chose to visit the Sdney Because the country is very rich culturally, the food, the monument ... and this trip will allow me to improve my Français. In this country and can easily go to the beach, and I go diving


I'm dying to visit Sydney Opera House, Royal Botanic Garden, and I'd like to see, Wildlife World, Sydney Tower


I have a few questions you asked?

What season will be when we get there!
prepare for my suitcase.
Do you have a pet?
Have children with whom I could talk?
What is you address? To know where I go when I arrived


I like this type of travel because it allows us to create links, and this requires us to use English to speak,


I'm looking to going forwad


Yours sincerely
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Bonjour François, bienvenue sur le forum.

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J'ai terminé mon expression écrite , j'aimerais <Conditionnel présent bien que quelqu'un puise me corriger. <Infinitif
Merci d'avance. <Point
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Dear Mr and Mrs Tom, <Virgule

It's really nice of you to accommodate me for a week at your place.

I have received your mail, it allowed me to discover the place where I will be staying for a week.
Now it is my turn to introduce myself.

My name is François, I am fourteen years old, I live in France, more especially in Brittany, in a small city near Rennes.
I like playing sports and going to the cinema. I am interested in new technologies. I'm in 11th grade.

I have a sister called Mary, she was thirteen, she's a twirler. <(= majorette ? C'est ce que tu as voulu dire ?) My mother is a teacher, my father is a marketing man, he sells kitchens.

Thank you for the pictures which enable me to get an idea of what I can expect.

I have chosen to visit Sidney because the city is very rich culturally, also for the food, the monuments, etc and this trip will offer me a good opportunity to improve my English. In this country I think I can easily go to the beach and go diving.

I'm dying to visit Sydney Opera House, the Royal Botanic Garden, and I'd like to see Wildlife World, Sydney Tower.

I have a few questions to ask you:

- What season will it be when we get there? (I need to know in order to take the right sort of clothes.)
- Do you have a pet?
- Are there any teenagers with whom I could talk?
- What is your address? (To know where to go when I arrive.)

I like this type of travel because it allows us to create links, and this requires us to speak English,

I'm looking forward to meeting you.

Yours sincerely,
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- Tu sembles avoir de gros soucis, entre autres difficultés, avec la ponctuation. Tu mets une virgule souvent à tort et à travers mais tu oublies de mettre un point à la fin de la phrase. Or, tout comme en français, l'anglais met un point à la fin de chaque phrase !
- Quand tu ignores un mot précis, cherche-le dans le dictionnaire, il n'y a aucune honte à ça. Je le fais constamment.
- Apprends à ne plus confondre le pronom sujet "you" avec l'adjectif possessif "your" quand bien même une seule lettre les distingue.
Bonne chance.